Friday, October 01, 2010

Six Sentence Sunday: No Good Deed

The inestimable Graylin Fox and Sara Brookes have inexplicably allowed me to contribute to Six Sentence Sunday, wherein authors (a group which I aspire to include myself in) offer six sentences from their current works in progress.

Below are six sentences from "No Good Deed", a short story I am revising in a perhaps futile attempt to get something fictive published. Judge with appropriate harshness. (And, yes, I am aware today is Friday, not Sunday, but the posts are aggregated for Sunday publication. One must have the work up for linkage in advance.)

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“But if your friend isn’t burning, I wonder where the smoke is coming from.”

“Good question,” I replied. “His clothing, perhaps?”

“Engulfed in a pyre of mystical flame, and naked in public. Not your friend’s day, is it?”

“Actually, it’s his birthday.”

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Comments are welcome. I may yet post the entire work (temporarily) for feedback before I sub it out again.

11 comments:

  1. Being your own birthday candle? Priceless!

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  2. Smokin! Heh. Welcome to Six Sunday!

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  3. What a way to spend a birthday! At least it's a mystical flame.

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  4. I loved it!! OMG, I want to read more!

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  5. I definitely want to read more! Welcome to Six Sunday.

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  6. For heaven's sake, somebody blow that poor man...out.

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  7. Burning, naked, and turning a year older....sounds like fun! Thanks for contributing!

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  8. I just kept thinking, so the guy is smoking hot and naked. Yes, my mind is in the gutter. Always.

    It's my first time too, and it didn't hurt a bit.

    Thanks for sharing.
    Christa

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  9. Oh, I love the tone of this. Makes me want to see more and know just what is going on.

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  10. What? That's it? I liked the tone of the piece.

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